Question

16．假如你是李華，即將初中畢業(yè)．請根據(jù)下面表格中的提示內(nèi)容，給在讀的學弟學妹們寫一封信，講述你對自己滿意和不滿意的方面，并希望他們在學校度過一段美好的時光．

滿意的方面	學習努力，養(yǎng)成了良好的學習習慣
	樂于助人，尤其是幫助那些在功課方面有困難的同學
不滿意的方面	很少鍛煉身體
	不常參加社會活動

要求：
1．語言流暢，行文連貫；
2.80詞左右． （開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)）
Dear friends，
How time flies and I'llgraduate from the junior school soon．
Since I entered this school，I have been studying hard and have developed some good study habits．As a result，I have been doing well in my subjects．And I have always been ready to help others，especially those classmates who have had difficulty in their lessons during the past three years．
However，I didn't take much exercise．I didn't often take part in social activities，either．
Now I hope you're having a great time at school．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇圖表作文．內(nèi)容是給學弟學妹們寫封信說說你對自己滿意和不滿意的方面，并希望他們在學校度過一段美好的時光．注意信件的格式．時態(tài)主要為一般過去時和現(xiàn)在完成時．人稱主要為第一人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點：
1．滿意的方面；學習努力，養(yǎng)成了良好的學習習慣，樂于助人，尤其是幫助那些在功課方面有困難的同學
2．不滿意的方面；很少鍛煉身體，不常參加社會活動
3．希望
常用到的重點短語：
study hard 努力學習
as a result 因此
do well in 擅長…
be ready to do sth 樂于做某事
have difficulty in  在…有困難
take part in 參加
【高分句型】
1．Since I entered this school，I have been studying hard and have developed some good study habits．
since引導的時間狀語從句，常常和現(xiàn)在完成時連用．
2．I have always①been ready to help others，especially those classmates ②who have had difficulty in their lessons during the past three years．
①be ready to do sth 樂于做某事
②who作為關(guān)系詞的定語從句，who作為從句的主語，修飾先行詞classmates．have difficulty in  在…有困難
3．Now I hope you're having a great time at school．
hope后是省略了引導詞that的賓語從句．

解答 Dear friends，
How time flies and I'll graduate from the junior school soon．
Since I entered this school，I have been studying hard and have developed some good study habits．【高分句型】As a result，I have been doing well in my subjects．And I have always been ready to help others，especially those classmates who have had difficulty in their lessons during the past three years．【高分句型】（滿意的方面）
However，I didn't take much exercise．I didn't often take part in social activities，either．（不滿意的方面）
Now I hope you're having a great time at school．【高分句型】（希望和祝愿）
Yours，
Li Hua

點評 考生首先要認真閱讀前面的提示認真審題，確定文章的中心．注意文章文體、人稱和時態(tài)．運用適當?shù)亩陶Z表達中心思想，增加作文的可讀性．完成提示詞時也要符合事實．溫馨提醒：考生必須認真查驗是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯誤及標點誤用等．
這篇短文使用了一些固定句式和短語，為文章增色不少．學習中注意總結(jié)，牢記一些固定句式及短語，寫作時就可以適當引用，使文章的表達更有邏輯性，更富有條理．