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16．你即將畢業(yè)，學(xué)校要舉行2012屆畢業(yè)典禮．假設(shè)你將作為畢業(yè)生代表在會(huì)上用英語(yǔ)發(fā)言，請(qǐng)寫(xiě)一篇發(fā)言稿．
內(nèi)容包括：1．回顧幾年來(lái)的校園生活．2．看今天自己的進(jìn)步．
3．感謝老師和同學(xué)們的幫助；感謝父母的支持，向母校及老師們致以祝福．
作文要求：1．不能照抄原文； 不得出現(xiàn)學(xué)校和學(xué)生的真實(shí)姓名．
2．語(yǔ)句連貫，詞數(shù)80個(gè)左右．開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Dear teachers and students，
  It's a great honor for me to have such a chance to make a speech at this special moment and special place．First，I would like to say"thank you"to all the teachers and the students here．It has been three years since we came to the beautiful school．When we were here three years ago，we found everything new and strange．We were curious about everything．
Our teachers are very friendly and helpful．They always try to make their lessons lively and interesting．When we have difficulties in learning，they are patient enough to help us．We could hardly succeed without our teachers'efforts．We've also made lots of friends here．We study together，play together and help each other．We feel very happy in the school．Also，I want to say"thank you"to out parents．Thanks for their support．Thanks for what they have do ne for us．
Last，I wish our school more and more beautiful，our teachers healthy and happy，and all of us a good future!
Thank you very much indeed．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是作為畢業(yè)生代表在會(huì)上用英語(yǔ)發(fā)言，回顧幾年來(lái)的校園生活并表示感激之情．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過(guò)去時(shí)．人稱主要為第一、三人稱．
寫(xiě)作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開(kāi)作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開(kāi)作文，即本文的寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：
1．回顧幾年來(lái)的校園生活．2．看今天自己的進(jìn)步．
3．感謝老師和同學(xué)們的幫助；感謝父母的支持，向母校及老師們致以祝福．

常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
be curious about 對(duì)…好奇
try to do sth 盡力做某事
make friends 交朋友
make…adj  讓…怎么樣
thanks for…因?yàn)椤�而謝謝
【高分句型】
1．①When we ②have difficulties in learning，they are ③patient enough to help us．
①when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句．
②have difficulties in doing sth 做某事有困難．
③形容詞+enough+to do sth 足夠怎么樣做某事
2．①Thanks for ②what they have done for us．
①thanks for…因?yàn)椤�而謝謝．
②what 引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句，作為for的賓語(yǔ)．

解答 Dear teachers and students，
     It's a great honor for me to have such a chance to make a speech at this special moment and special place．First，I would like to say"thank you"to all the teachers and the students here．
     It has been three years since we came to the beautiful school．When we were here three years ago，we found everything new and strange．We were curious about everything．（回顧幾年來(lái)的校園生活）
     Our teachers are very friendly and helpful．They always try to make their lessons lively and interesting．When we have difficulties in learning，they are patient enough to help us．【高分句型】We could hardly succeed without our teachers'efforts．（看今天自己的進(jìn)步）We've also made lots of friends here．We study together，play together and help each other．We feel very happy in the school．Also，I want to say"thank you"to our parents．Thanks for their support．Thanks for what they have done for us．【高分句型】（感謝老師和同學(xué)們的幫助；感謝父母的支持）
   Last，I wish our school more and more beautiful，our teachers healthy and happy，and all of us a good future!（向母校及老師們致以祝福）
   Thank you very much indeed．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 這是一篇給材料作文，本文已經(jīng)給出了主要寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)，動(dòng)筆前要先認(rèn)真閱讀要點(diǎn)，然后圍繞要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)發(fā)揮．寫(xiě)作中，應(yīng)注意描述的全面性，盡量將提示的內(nèi)容利用上．語(yǔ)言的表述應(yīng)該符合語(yǔ)法的結(jié)構(gòu)，造句應(yīng)該符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣．適當(dāng)使用連詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系．