Question

這段時(shí)間，霧霾成為備受社會(huì)關(guān)注的焦點(diǎn); 改善污染現(xiàn)狀、反思生活方式成為人們關(guān)心的問(wèn)題。請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)寫(xiě)一篇保護(hù)環(huán)境的短文，并談?wù)勀愕挠^點(diǎn)。
1、目前，地球變得越來(lái)越擁擠和污染。如何保護(hù)環(huán)境已成為當(dāng)今世界最大的難題之一；
2、空氣質(zhì)量變得越來(lái)越差，損害人們的健康；
3、廢水污染河流，殺死大量的魚(yú)；
4、政府應(yīng)該投入全部努力去阻止污染和改善環(huán)境；
5、人們應(yīng)該改變不健康的生活方式。你的建議......
注意：1、文章必須包含所給內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，要求語(yǔ)句通順、意思連貫；
2、第5個(gè)要點(diǎn)要用1~2句話發(fā)表自己的觀點(diǎn)；
3、詞數(shù)80左右（開(kāi)頭已給出的內(nèi)容不計(jì)入字?jǐn)?shù)）。
At present ,Earth is becoming  __________________________________________________
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Answer 1

At present, Earth is becoming more and more crowded and polluted. How to protect the environment has become one of the biggest problems in the world now. The quality of the air is getting worse and worse. It does harm to people’s health. Waste water pollutes rivers and a lot of fish have died. The government should put all its effort into preventing pollution and improving the environment. People should change their unhealthy life styles. I think more people should go to work by bus instead of by car.

試題分析：這篇短文要求我們以現(xiàn)在我們的環(huán)境現(xiàn)狀為話題寫(xiě)一篇作文。最近一段時(shí)間霧霾非常嚴(yán)重，這也引起了很多人的反思，我們地球的環(huán)境問(wèn)題。在題目中為我們列出了幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)，我們需要用正確的英語(yǔ)將其表達(dá)出來(lái)，并且在文中要有自己的觀點(diǎn)。所以寫(xiě)作時(shí)一定要注意不要遺漏要點(diǎn)，并且表達(dá)要流暢，語(yǔ)句要通順。通過(guò)審題我們可知該篇作文應(yīng)主要使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，要注意使用較好的短語(yǔ)或句型使文章有條理，內(nèi)容充實(shí)。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇范文是一篇比較優(yōu)秀的作文。首先文章內(nèi)容充實(shí)完整，概括了題目中要求的所有要點(diǎn)，并有自己的觀點(diǎn)。其次這篇短文表達(dá)流暢，意思連貫。在文中出現(xiàn)了大量較好的句型句式，長(zhǎng)短句結(jié)合，使文章更有節(jié)奏感。如How to protect the environment has become one of the biggest problems in the world now.、It does harm to people’s health.、The government should put all its effort into preventing pollution and improving the environment、I think more people should go to work by bus instead of by car等。