Question

以為My first DIY job 為題，用英語寫一篇短文， 詞數(shù)90個左右。內(nèi)容必須包括以下要點(diǎn)，也可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，但不要逐條翻譯。
要點(diǎn)：1. 趕在媽媽生日到來前做了一個生日音樂盒，并對此加以保密以給媽媽一個驚喜；
2. 花了許多時間，在制作期間曾出錯；
3. 將一朵真玫瑰粘貼在盒蓋上；
4. 打開盒子后媽媽就聽到生日歌；
5. 第一次親手為媽媽做禮物， 媽媽高興， 你更高興。
My first DIY job
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Answer 1

One possible version:
My first DIY job
Mum’s birthday was coming, so I decided to make her a birthday music box. I kept this secret, because I wanted to give her a surprise. It took me three hours to make it. During the course of making it, many things went wrong. I sticked a real rose to the cover of the box. After Mum opened the box, she heard the birthday song. This was the first time for me to make a present for Mum with my own hands. Mum was very happy, and I was even happier.

試題分析：本文是材料作文，考生在寫作之前必須認(rèn)真讀題，把握寫作要求和寫作目的。本文要求寫My first DIY job，內(nèi)容是給媽媽做生日禮物的過程。應(yīng)該用第一人稱，時態(tài)是一般過去時。寫作前最好先列出提綱，寫出有關(guān)的短語和固定表達(dá)備用。最后連起來。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】 本文做到了包含所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，語句通順，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號運(yùn)用正確。還恰當(dāng)?shù)剡\(yùn)用了些短語和句式，如It took me three hours to make it ; go wrong等等。并注意了句子開頭的變化和的銜接如：so，because and等等。