Question

有人曾說 “Man is the maker of his own happiness”，你是如何理解這句話的？請按下面的要求用英文寫一篇短文。
內(nèi)容要求：
你對這句話的理解；
你認為什么是happiness；
如何獲得你自己的happiness；
注意：
詞數(shù)120左右；
文中不能出現(xiàn)考生的具體信息。
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Answer 1

One possible version:
Someone says man is the maker of his own happiness, I think it is quite right . No one else can give it to us .Only through our own efforts can we gain happiness.
Then what is happiness ? Different persons may put forward various answers. But in my opinion, happiness means kindness, love and unselfishness. I'll never forget an old lady. She lives in a small house alone. But the old lady often helps others with a smile. Whenever it snows, she is always the first to clean the paths. She looks after several children living nearby. Perhaps she is unlucky, but I think she is a happy person, and she has got real happiness.
In a word , it is only by bringing happiness to others that we can get happiness.

試題分析：本篇書面表達中心話題是幸福，此話題貼近生活，學生們有話可說，但是在寫作時一定要注意審題，不要跑題，要按要點提示去完成寫作任務，在理解man is the maker of his own happiness這句話的基礎(chǔ)上，提出自己對幸福的看法，以及如何去實現(xiàn)幸福。此外，在句型句式上要盡量有所變化，可以使用非謂語，倒裝句等，不要使句式過于單一。在語言表達上要適當使用插入語，連接詞等以使上下文語義連貫流暢，同時也使文章有層次感，有條理性。
【亮點說明】本篇范文第一段表明了自己對man is the maker of his own happiness這句話的理解；第二段論述自己對幸福的認識；第三段提出如何去獲得幸福，這種三段式結(jié)構(gòu)使文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，層次分明。此外，作者使用了問句Then what is happiness ? 以及 短語in my opinion，In a word等起到了很好的承上啟下的作用，使文章上下銜接更為自然。作者還使用了倒裝句Only through our own efforts can we gain happiness.強調(diào)句In a word , it is only by bringing happiness to others that we can get happiness.讓步狀語從句 Whenever it snows等，這些表達都豐富了文章的句式，成為了文章的亮點。